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[Sandwich]

WinRAR - lol. Decent enough, not a terrible storyline and not too terrible animation. Good work!9

PentilexTV responds:

Thanks! Constructive criticism is the best I can get!

[Horse poop]

Not bad for a first flash, i suppose

There's plenty to be improved here. Most of it deals with the slightly more complicated aspects of making a flash animation... first one is preloaders - this is pretty much standard fare for flashes - you want the content to load before hand to avoid any errors in the flash due to improper loading... most commonly - sound and music will be off.

But you have no sound or music. and that's the second bit. Learn how to put that in and control it.

Next, you'll want to learn basic actionscript controls like gotoandplay(); and gotoandstop(); .... these will allow you to firstly stop the animation at the end (at which point it is customary to put a replay button and / or credits... also it lets you jump between scenes. This is helpful with wholly different places the flash takes place in or camera angles things like that which you want represented in it.

Your animation is pretty good, really, but try not to rely too heavily on tweening. look into making your symbols movie clips and then making that symbol's animation do the morphing work while having the tweens provide the symbol's overall motion. I think the key to making a really great flash is to master the balance between tweening and frame by frame animation. (visually, at least)

hope this helps out. Looks like your flash will probably pass, but if i were you i'd put all these suggestions into it, add some more to the story itself, and then resubmit it. (upon which time, just delete this one - it's not doing anybody any favors by being here -no offense-)

Good luck!

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jathom30 responds:

Thanks for the info. Do you know of any tutorials online that would be worth checking out? Your bit about gotoandplay() went right over my head.

[8 bit crunch]

My eyes hurt

This could have been good.

It loops at the end. Bad bad bad.

The intro made me smile in anticipation then you ditched the 8-bit and went full on flash. Remake it all in 8-Bit and then we'll talk.

DJWOJO responds:

Unlike other people, I will agree with your criticism. That's a valid point. I will take this into consideration forfuture animations.

[Ikkle and Toad - 2]

Another great installment

Hooray for ikkle and toad! I think you should have kept the deleted scene in, imo. Otherwise, just wanted to let you know you're still doing quite well haha...

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Kamize responds:

Hooray! I'm glad you like the series. But I have to disagree with you about the deleted scene. It totally broke up the rythm of the animation and was out of place. I think it was more amusing as a link in the back personally. So I kind of did keep it didn't I, I kept it as a deleted scene.

Thanks much!

[The Stroll]

Pretty decent

I don't think the scanning worked so well for parts that weren't to be included in the background. Also you should outline with darker lines and crop the objects all the way up to them so they don't have the bordering white crop junk

First thing i noticed was his walk sequence was a bit rough. The transition between your last and first frame is nonexistant. You should copy the first frame and paste it just after your intended last frame and use the skinning to help determine what you need to do to make the character get back to where he started. Then you can just delete the copied first frame and there you go.

Sounds more complicated than it really is and is very worth it in the end.

Really, i liked it. It was quaint - almost dreamy. i liked how it had no sound effects but just a floating theme.

At some parts though you lacked background of any sort and that should be fixed... adn that break from the staircase... you should have drawn the two objects separately so it doesn't look like it gets cut out from the staircase.

Anyways... there's my two cents. Good work - nice to see people experimenting!

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MorrowDays responds:

Thanks for all the tips, they're definitely going to help later on.

The walk sequence was like that because it was more of a jump sequence that I made at the beginning of the film so that it'd line up when he was jumping from stone to stone. Now I might redo the walk sequence for the rest of the animation, but when I was making this version of the film, I was under a deadline for a division of the "sprockets" international film fest, called jump cuts, which is a sort of minifilm fest for students. This was my entry for the grades 7-9 category (I'm in grd.7) and I had to hand it in today. like you said, it's not perfect, but it's decent, and I think it'll work just fine.

Backrounding: One idea I had last night was to have paint splatters in various points of the movie where there wasn't as much backround stuff (example: right before he gets eaten by the fish) which I think would add to the experimental aspect of it, so if I do a re-sub, I'll add that, as well as the darkened outlines of some of the scanned art.

So, again, thanks for all of the comments, I'll keep them in mind. Glad you liked the music and the quaintness!